This is now complete. I felt I had to check all of the girls’
timelines. I found that they were actually correct. No two year pregnancies and
nobody got engaged to two different people. The change in the letters was also
subtle and at the right speed.
I wanted to bring some more tension into the Renate strand.
I think I have managed that but I haven’t had to alter it a lot. I’ve made a
little more of the voices in the head and added a few more examples in. I
imagine it to be the voice of the collective Nazi spirit. If it does become a
stage play, I imagine a narrator / chorus type character dressed in an SS
uniform. This voice stops after her breakdown. I feel that I want to replace it
with something but I’m not sure what, yet. Hopefully it will come.
I also wanted to make up my mind what to do about the German
words. Translate them or show meaning by example the first time they’re used? I’m
still not sure, so I shall revisit that during the next edit.
I’ve taken some bits out but also added in some other
sections. So, it’s still running at just under 100,000 words. Hopefully, some
natural tightening might help there. The question is, does it all really work together?
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